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Logline has evolved
Hi to everyone. Hope you're enjoying the challenge and benefiting as much as I am.

As I'm going through the sequences my longline is evolving. Would you mind considering the latest version? Thanks

'In a world of human trafficking and modern day slavery, a orphaned Vietnamese brother, must battle the evil Mr Trang and do whatever it takes to find his sister'
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David Jadunath
An orphaned Vietnamese boy battles a human trafficker to find his missing sister.

After you are satisfied with encapsulating your story, try writing down the line
beginning with the central character and following with his/her task. Think in terms
of the subject/verb/object structure.
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265 week(s) ago
Hi David

Thanks for the advice, this is much sharper. I'll keep working on it.

Thank you
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265 week(s) ago
Anne Alexander Sieder
I agree with David. The logline has a better flow and is much more succinct.
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265 week(s) ago

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