If you return to Tim's logline tips and review the four elements, you may add more punch
to the logline. So far, I learned that if more effort is put into answer the four logline elements,
a great deal of time may be saved, especially for people who have a reduced amount of
This exercise may be done while working at other daily tasks. Here are the elements:
-Establishes a character with a problem
-Shows the unique hook
-Provides the situational recurring moment
I think that your character's task is not focused on the main action of the story, for the
purpose of establishing a logline i.e., the problem is only abstract and internal, so far.
Perhaps, you can try to find an external action and you may be on your way since
you are clear about his arrogance and misbehavior that needs correction.
Brainstorm a nemesis/main opposition that will create a problem, forms the bane
of the character's existence, and which the character needs to resolve. Set up the
doctor in a situation where he flows along without reproach for his arrogance
that is flawed behavior covering up some painful experience in the past,
until he runs out of flaw and has to rethink his attitude.
Here is a workable logline for "Miss Congeniality".
A tomboy FBI agent goes undercover at the American Miss Pageant to solve
an important case until the event receives a formidable threat where
she must learn to be a tough woman, to avoid being thrown off the case,
and out of the bureau.
Find a situation for the doctor where the stakes are raised and which puts
him to the test of medical and people skills.
Using the template, you may have: An arrogant doctor is scheduled to perform
a life-threatening surgical procedure in order to keep his license after a patient
died due to his negligence, but he must convince four junior operating room staff
with up-to-date knowledge, to work with him.
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